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« on: July 02, 2005, 05:21:30 PM »
Please post your comments on Fraylor's Banters here.

*Puts on some armour before the first comments are delivered.


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« Reply #1 on: July 03, 2005, 12:13:57 AM »
Before any more comments maybe you should provide us with some more information about Daie (alignment, deity, etc.) cause we don't know (he/she? I think he :? but I'm not totally sure) personality and therefore can't understand Daie .
And I think you should cut each "banter" into at least 3 smaller ones. And maybe reduce the amounts of dialog because a banter shouldn't looke like taken from a book :?
Evil hidden everywhere
Evil has a chilling stare
Null and void of any care
Is where the answer lies
It does no good to beg or cry
It does no good to question why
It does no good it never dies
Evil never dies

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« Reply #2 on: July 03, 2005, 04:16:44 AM »
Daie: Well he is a male elven Druid/cleric. He is Chaotic Good. He worships Selune.

I shall be putting the rest on a seperate thread now.  :shock:
*Wonders if he should have installed breaks, before he realises its too late and that he is stuck in the middle of a motorway with nowhere to go but forward and that was very fast.*

But this is actually a friend of mines character, the friend is working with me on the mod helping me with the writing. So I agreed for us to make his character into an NPC too.


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« Reply #3 on: July 06, 2005, 04:44:57 AM »
There's an awful lot of information given in those banters - it would probably be better to break them into more manageable chunks. However interesting a banter is, a player most likely doesn't want to click through so much dialogue when he/she has other things to do.
Would you give a guy a foot massage? If so, maybe you'd like Nathaniel.

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« Reply #4 on: July 07, 2005, 08:07:23 AM »
I know that and I did say I was shortening them further in the post. BTW sorry for not posting in the last few days I was having a week off. However I was just checking on the London Bombings using the BBC news website and I thought I would make a few other posts. Anyway I'm just going off to check on some of my friends, so CYA next monday most likely.


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« Reply #5 on: July 12, 2005, 01:16:04 AM »
:oops: I'm sorry, Fraylor - I read the banters and then rushed off  without reading the end bit :oops:
Would you give a guy a foot massage? If so, maybe you'd like Nathaniel.

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